Author's Note: This was a stream of consciousness journal entry where the concrete image was a clearing in the woods.
It is a warm summer day as I trudge through the woods. Small little patches of light shine in through the few breaks in the dense foliage. My feet follow a narrow, dusty, path, the only one in the large forest. I follow the path, not exactly sure why am here. I guess I came here for peace, but now my heart strives for adventure. So, I eventually stray from the path.
It is a warm summer day as I trudge through the woods. Small little patches of light shine in through the few breaks in the dense foliage. My feet follow a narrow, dusty, path, the only one in the large forest. I follow the path, not exactly sure why am here. I guess I came here for peace, but now my heart strives for adventure. So, I eventually stray from the path.
That's why I am now in this predicament. I stumble over the fallen logs and step over the many plants that crowd the moss-covered forest floor. Why did I stray from the path? Now I can't find my way out, and I've been here for hours. When I first realized I was lost, I told my self that I would eventually find my way out if I went in one direction. Now I am not so sure. In fact, the only thought in my head is of despair, and I wonder how big this forest could possibly be. I guess I wanted adventure, and I got some.
Suddenly, I break out of the confines of the forest, and into a small clearing. The light streams in from above, unlike it was back in the forest. I look up and the clouds are floating effortlessly by. The patch of blue sky reminds me that there is a world outside this forest, but at the same time taunts me, so close to that world, and yet, so far. I can't resist, and I lay down in the soft grass. As I watch the clouds, the sunlight warms me, and I begin to feel sleepy. If only I could lie here longer, but I must find my way out. So I get up, and disappear back into the darkness and cool of the woods, and continue on my way.
This was very good Shaun it reminded me of a summer day that's kind of boring but it's a good boring. The only criticism I have is that the "My heart strives for adventure" part isn't really stressed I feel that you could broaden that thought the whole piece because it's a really good idea.
ReplyDeleteYour word choice was great, it was really detailed. I like the sentence "The patch of blue sky reminds me that there is a world outside this forest, but at the same time taunts me, so close to that world, and yet, so far."
ReplyDeleteYou used good vocabulary and had lots of got descriptions. I liked how you used "Small little patches of light shine in through the few breaks in the dense foliage."
ReplyDeleteI like the description here, and vocabulary. This is a pretty inspired piece, and seems like something that could easily continue.
ReplyDeleteThat was a very descriptive piece. It made me feel like i was watching from above.
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